Liar
What we had once
was perfect
or so we thought.
You act like you know me
but trust me,
you don't.
A relationship
built on lies
is no relationship at all.
But
I'm better off without you.
I promise.
Untitled.
Whispers.
They echo around the halls,
their stares are piercing.
Alone.
It's crowded here,
but I've never felt more alone.
Finally.
Finally we're together.
The look in your eyes says it all.
Every heartbreak,
every bad emotion,
every terrible thought
disappears when I'm here,
in your arms.
I like both, neither of them are dry(in terms of reading) at all. Liar is very bitter, which makes me like it. Untitled is a surprise, I thought it would be negative, but you changed it up at the end, nice twist, and definitely a very uplifting poem. They're both good work :)
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These sound to be obviously inspired by experience, and when we write about what we know, we write well. Keep it up, and don't ever stop writing.
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